Greencloak Message Board: Warrior cat story 2!!!
sure. Speaking of that, I have it planned out when Graypaw and Oakpaw become warriors so they can have kits and Graypaw goes missing. (You said Graypaw dies right and Oakpaw takes care of the kits?
Please, everyone, not a lot of cats from different clans falling in love action here. I give you all a lot of "freedom" (I lack a better word) when it comes to your character. I already have the stories problem and major events planned out, without a lot of side-problems for individual characters. I can not always make everyone's characters super important Bc I don't want to pick favorites and leave ppl out. This is the reason I make one (or two) of my characters the main character. I do understand your devotion to your character after you make it, so I try to be fair. Please don't abuse the fact that I let you choose what happens to your character. I don't mean this in a bad way, I realize you don't know your doing this half the time. It's just overwhelming for me. I hope you understand. Also, some ppl I know u don't do this, but I'm not saying names here. Im also not mad about this and I hope I haven't upset anyone. Thank you.
Wildclan thought he was dead because he was fighting a badger alone and was covered in blood. After Mistpaw found him, he stopped breathing for a while. minutes after he started breathing again, a rogue found him and dragged him off to save him. (Beechpaw was still in the badger den where he fought the badger.) The reason why they didn't take his body to camp because the warrior that was on the patrol with Mistpaw and Beechpaw was so badly injured, he needed immediate help. when they came back for Beechpaw, his body was gone. (they thought the badgers had come back and taken it because they saw a trail of blood and drag marks leading out of the back entrance.) Also, he didn't come back to camp anytime soon after he was rescued.
I want him to come back to the clan 2 moons after Creekkit's future kits are born. Creekkit's future kits are going to be born around 1 and a half to 2 years after he becomes a warrior.
I'll make the thread tomorrow. Please give me ideas for Beechpaw's story! I only have the basics ready in my mind.
Ok, a little about Graypaw (Grayfeather's) death, could she be returned, have her kits, but dies due to a fight of some kind please?
Here are the kits forms: (Is it okay that she has five?)
Name: Maplekit (Maplepaw, Mapleleaf)
Apperance: A red she-cat with green eyes, a white underbelly
Personality: Strong, loyal, sometimes bossy (loves to boss her littermates around)
Mate: Maybe take one in the future
Other: Was hidden when Grayfeather died, tries to stay strong after that, but sometimes takes her anger on her littermates
Name: Ivykit (Ivypaw, Ivybreeze)
Appearance: A silver she-cat with fluffy white paws and underbelly, blue eyes, black stripes
Personality: Strong, wild, brave
Mate: What? Not right now! I wanna be leader!
Other: One of the kits that watches Grayfeather die, doesn't show much feeling, but inside, she was torn in half, tries to stay strong, but seeing how Oakwhisker is reacting to her death, she falls in and cries
Name: Blazekit (Blazepaw, Blazerunner)
Appearance: (Somehow) A golden tom with amber eyes, hardly any white stripes, but a white tail tip
Personality: Compettivtie, loud, hyper
Mate: When older
Other: Another kit to watch Grayfeather's death, tries his best to get over with it, but he devlops a fear of whatever killed Grayfeather (He just freezes when he sees it)
Name: Cinderkit (Cinderpaw, Cinderflight)
Appearance: A silver and dark gray she-cat, green eyes, gray stripes on body
Personality: Shy, quiet, clumsy, sensitive to feelings
Mate: Not really...maybe if I change my mind?
Other: The last kit to experiance Grayfeather's death. She was orinagally wild, funny, and crazy, but when she saw Grayfeather's death, she went into a new form, sad, careful, and shy. She wanted to be a warrior at first, but then she wanted and begged to become medicine cat because she couldn't stand the feeling of hurting someone that another cat loved.
Name: Flamekit (Flamepaw, Flamestride)
Appearance: A light red and golden tom with blue eyes
Personality: Wise, brave and loyal
Last one was in a rush!
MODS LET THIS THROUGH!!
I'm going to create my thread now. Please give me your ideas. please! This is my first time creating a thread.
It will be called "Beechpaw's Story: the lost apprentice.
once Beechpaw comes back to WildClan, I will write about his homecoming in my thread if that's ok with you.
ok on the kits. There isn't a huge battle in this like in the first story, but there is one. It's towards the end, however. The first main problem in the story is the disappearing cats.
that will connect
Thanks for the clarification. I'll have to think of some ideas for you.
I wasn't planning on posting about homecoming before it happened in your story because i wouldn't have the background info I need for Beechpaw's story.
Thank you, Tigris, for posting on my thread!
Everyone else, I do need ideas for Beechpaw's story badly. Mainly about when Beechpaw wakes up after being at the cutter. what should he remeber?
I'm bored so I'm just gonna make this:
R.I.P, (insert cat name)
Book 1, the forgotten clan:
Moonlight (elder, died of old age)
Scarclaws (Killed by Silentdeath)
Longshadow (killed by Scratchflank)
Nettlepaw (Killed by Ruggedclaw)
Robinkit (killed by Battlescar)
Sky Drizzle (killed by Ruggedclaw)
Sunstrike (killed by Fawnnettle)
Night (killed by a Deathclan rogue)
Flamepelt (killed by Silentdeath)
Book 2, (don't have a name yet)
Thunderheart (elder, died of old age)
Tigrisstar (died in a fire)
Howlpaw (died in a fire)
Lilypetal (died in a fire)
Grayfur (died in a fire)
Beechpaw (missing/assumed dead)
I have a few questions before starting ch 1 about Beechpaw.
- Beechpaw is half WildClan, and half rogue. Who from WildClan could be his mother?
- Also, who could be Beechpaw's littermates?
- Who could be his mentor?
- Which warrior(s) from WildClan do you want to be on the patrol when the badgers show up? (At least one of them has to be hurt bad enough to be rush back to camp right after the fight.)
I think I'll start with his apprentice ceremony...
cats on patrol:
Featherlake (the one who lead the patrol)
Lightningstrike (Beechpaw's mentor)
and Owltalon, who would be Owlpaw at that time, so he could be the one to get really hurt
srry I haven't been on I've been busy
Foxsnatch had been almost as devastated as Redclaw when the patrol returned without Emberflight. "Perhaps a fox got her," Ravenpelt had said. "Then we will have to be careful, we can send another patrol," Cheetahstar had replied. Blizzardtail was now on this patrol, with Bramblepelt leading, a dark brown furred tom with gold colored patches, white on his chest and stomach, and green eyes. Besides Blizzardtail, Thornheart, Whitefang, Stormcloud and Viperfang were on the patrol. They carefully wove their way through the tall grasses, ears pricked and alert. Blizzardtail wasn't sure how they expected to find anything; dew lay heavy on the grass so it was near impossible to scent anything. Suddenly, Bramblepelt halted. The patrol crowded around him to see what he found. Claw marks scored deep into the ground, and they were cat-size. There was the faintest hint of Emberflight's scent. It looked as if she had struggled, but against what? Bramblepelt was sniffing the claw marks. "I can't scent anything behind this dew! I can't pick up the thing that attacked her," he growled. "The thing that strikes me as strange is there is no blood," said Stormcloud. "It looks as if something was just trying to take her away," commented Viperfang. "Well, maybe they didn't need to hurt her, there was enough to just drag her away. Smells like foxes to me," said Whitefang. "Maybe. Let's keep looking," said Bramblepelt, and started off again.
srry it's not much
For the patrol, could I swap out Hawktalon for Mistpaw? (She's the one who finds Beechpaw in the badger den. This way, she will be one of the cats that least suspect it when Beechpaw comes back.)
I also ment to tell you that Mistpaw and Mountainpaw become apprentices at the same time as Beechpaw and his littermates.
I'll start ch 1 as soon as possible.
Could I swap out Lionpride for Mistpaw and her mentor. I think the patrol is starting to get to large for not one of them to notice that there are two badgers instead of one. That could be just my personal opinion though...
Sure you can do that
Pumapelt's paws tingled with excitement when she neared the Spiritclan border. Risingstar had chosen her to come with him on the patrol, along with Silvershine, Wolffrost, Stormrunner, Ivyheart, and Sweetfeather. Risingstar slowed his pace as they drew closer to the border. When they reached it, he swerved and trotted along the river until he reached the part where the stream ran dry. There was now a thin trickle in the dry bed. Pumapelt expected Risingstar to cross the border, but he didn't. "What are we going to do now?" She asked. Risingstar sat down. "Were going to wait for a patrol," he said. Duh. Pumapelt looked at her paws and sat down. They only had to wait a few minutes, before they picked up a scent of an approaching patrol. Pumapelt hoped someone leading the patrol would be someone they knew, or were originally born in Wildclan or had been in Wildclan for a longer time. To their luck, when the patrol came into view it was lead by Nettleclaw. "Risingstar, what can I do for you?" She asked. A small black-brown tom padded up next to her. Pumapelt guessed that was her apprentice, but couldn't remember his name. Pumapelt looked over the patrol, and to her disappointment she didn't see Blizzardtail. The patrol was made up with Nettleclaw and her apprentice, Thistleburr, Drizzleheart, Shadowheart and his apprentice Mosspaw, and Pinefur and his apprentice Firepaw. Pumapelt then remembered Nettleclaw's apprentice was Shadepaw, whom she had seen once at a gathering. "We are missing two of our warriors, one is a queen. Featherlake and Aloebreeze. I would like to know if you have seen them," Risingstar said. Nettleclaw hesitated before speaking. "Featherlake and Aloebreeze are here with us," she replied. Risingstar's eyes widened and he said, "We must see them!" Then he regained his usual cool tone and finished with: "We must see that they're okay. Take us to Cheetahstar." Nettleclaw swapped glances with some of the other warriors. Then she nodded. "Very well, you may see Featherlake and Aloebreeze. Follow us." The Spiritclan cats flanked them all the way to Spiritclan camp.
ill finish this passage tomorrow
Shadepaw padded along side of Pumapelt silently, and Nettleclaw had sent Firepaw ahead to tell Cheetahstar of their coming. When they reached the camp, the Spiritclan cats went in first. When the Wildclan cats entered, curious eyes were watching them from all corners of the camp. Cheetahstar strode out into the clearing. Her deputy padded up next to her. "Risingstar," Cheetahstar dipped her head. "Cheetahstar," Risingstar dipped his head in return. "I assume your here because of a warrior and queen?" Asked Cheetahstar. Risingstar nodded. Aloebreeze slipped from the nursery, and Featherlake appeared from the warriors den. "Aloebreeze? Why did you leave and come here?" Risingstar asked. Aloebreeze settled her bold gaze on Risingstar. "I left because I will not have my kits grow up next to Bearkit," she growled. The Spiritclan cats began to murmur. What had Bearkit done? Risingstar blinked. "I don't know what he did, but Aloebreeze he was just a kit. You won't have to worry though, he's an apprentice now," Risingstar told the queen. Aloebreeze's eyes flashed with regret, then she shook her head firmly. "I'm staying here, and so is Featherlake," she said. The big white tom Featherlake blinked, but said nothing. "I would like my kits to be raised in Spiritclan. When I'm done raising them, me and Featherlake will be elders." Risingstar's eyes filled with grief and sorrow. "We will miss you, but Wildclan respects your choice," he said. Aloebreeze dipped her head, then disappeared back into the nursery. When she and Featherlake vanished, Risingstar turned to Cheetahstar. "Is there by any chance one of your warriors has gone missing?" He asked. Ravenpelt opened her mouth to speak, but Cheetahstar silenced her with a glance. "No. We have not. Now go," she said, turning away. "Sleetstream, Icetail, Crystalpaw, Shadowheart, Mosspaw, Willowtail, and Emberpaw will see you out of our territory," she said, before disappearing into her den. What was Ravenpelt going to say? What was Cheetahstar hiding? Why would she ask so many warriors to escort Wildclan off of Spiritclan territory? The thoughts popped up into her mind. She saw some of the Wildclan warriors exchanging glances. So I'm not the only one who noticed. Risingstar just dipped his head, and turned to leave with his warriors behind him.
Good job on the chapters
Appearance:A slight build with black,short fur. She has brown eyes and a gray sock on her left front leg. She has a notch in her ear and a small scar on her right hind leg. Her muzzle has a few scars from battles.
Personality:When she was a kit she broke her tail but it healed perfectly fine, her birth name was Smallkit. She is bitter sweet and snapp-ish. She can argue in a polite manner though, you don't want to be on her wrong side, she is a very formidable enemy.
One thing that makes this cat unique:She was a rogue at one time. But she came back to the clan.
This was just from an RP so you can take out some of the stuff if you want.
Also sorry everyone I didn't post some story today, I was busy. Also, I'm making another story in real life, about cats (Wildcats like lions and tigers) and I would like some characters. You guys are my friends, so I'd like to ask you if you'd make a character if I posted the prologue and the form here. (You would be able to get high ranks in the story since I'm not asking random people) Do you want me to or are you not interested in making a character?