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sparrowwarrior3

Well, apologies for anything weird (typos, repeats, etc.) but as we all know, mobile SAMB is.. broken, at this point.

 

Stealthily, smartly, patiently.
That-that was how to ambush your enemies.
That was how you gain an advantage in battle.
That was something I needed to work on.
"Slower, Aleu," her father scolded, or "Time your attack with your strategy."
I often backed off stubbornly or howled with annoyance.
/Do Pack Wolves deal with this? I often thought.
Ugh, of course not.
Pack Wolves merely needed to fight for food. To hunt. To survive.
If they were threatened as a group, they defended as a group.
If they were threatened as a single, for leadership, like Father, they left it to Father.
And so he and I were cast out, I for 'impureness' and him for weakness.
I never told Father this, but we both knew that we both hated them.
Even I, a small pup who barely knew the ways of the wild at the time, now hate those wolves as much as my father does.
When I was younger, my mind tender and absorbant to the teachings of other nursing mothers, I asked if it was wrong for father to dislike them.
"It's wrong to hate, yes, but I have the right to be entitled by opinion. Out here we are free, Aleu, free from rules and leading and betrayal." He had said.
I had agreed. The ones bound to us as family left us to starvation and cold.
They made us vulnerable, gave us a need to fight.
The vast expanse of stars now cloaked the sky above, a beautiful sheen of the unknown, above the snow that capped the land below.
The beautiful lights always led the way, according to Father, to destiny, loyalty, and through the hardships of finding out who you were.
"Aleu," he now called.
He rested atop a stone, fur silver tinted with moonlight.
He howled, and I felt restored as the sound tingled through me and spiked out my fur.
I joined him, and our song traveled in the wind to the starry skies up above, the moon bearing witness. My father looked down at me, pausing, pride and love in his eyes.
I met his gaze, and I wanted to grin, laugh, enjoy something.
But we were alone.
And I sensed my father's will for company as much as mine.
"Father?"
"Yes, Aleu?"
"Where will we go? What will it take?"
Father lowered his head.
"We will go as far as it takes to survive." He answered, voice strong, yet brittle.
I suddenly was filled with... grief.
"And how far is that Father?" I asked quietly, looking at my paws.
"Aleu, I want you to be honest..." he started, looking back up to the stars.
I glanced at him.
"Do you want to go back to your home?"
I didn't look at him, nor speak. No, he couldn't mean the Pack. Nope.

And as if he read my thoughts, he added,

"Do you want to return to the Pack?"

 

I'll attempt to do more. This isnt one of my weller written stories, and lag is not helping!

Well, thanks for reading, anyway. Please tell me what you think and what I could change, and if its worth it to continue..

 

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Hi there  I'm a 

Gahoolian

foxcraft master

proud tigerstar supporter (he did what he did since bluestar ruined his cheezburger. Logic.)

i ship siffla

saaaamb

i don't ship Pelli and soren

Well I guess I'm into WOF now...

 

 call me sparrow

 

-Sparrowwarrior3

 

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Hi there  I'm a 

Gahoolian

foxcraft master

proud tigerstar supporter (he did what he did since bluestar ruined his cheezburger. Logic.)

i ship siffla

saaaamb

i don't ship Pelli and soren

Well I guess I'm into WOF now...

 

 call me sparrow

 

-Sparrowwarrior3

 

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sparrowwarrior3

*sigh 

..... anyone?

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Hi there  I'm a 

Gahoolian

foxcraft master

proud tigerstar supporter (he did what he did since bluestar ruined his cheezburger. Logic.)

i ship siffla

saaaamb

i don't ship Pelli and soren

Well I guess I'm into WOF now...

 

 call me sparrow

 

-Sparrowwarrior3

 

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cobrapanther473

That's way better than my story I'm writing on Microsoft Word.

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Đ₳ł₴Ɏ/₮ⱤɄ₴₮

I am...

A Jedi!

A Redcloak!

A Half-Blood(Daughter of Poseidon)!

A Werewolf!

Gang: Me, Devin/Worthy, Karmo/Jolt, Shane/King, Conor, Briggan, Abeke, Uraza, Meilin, Jhi, Rollan, Essix, Anakin, Obi-Wan, Ak'wan, Aventine, Tamaki

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sparrowwarrior3

Tysm! :)

And an additional thanks for replying.

 

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Hi there  I'm a 

Gahoolian

foxcraft master

proud tigerstar supporter (he did what he did since bluestar ruined his cheezburger. Logic.)

i ship siffla

saaaamb

i don't ship Pelli and soren

Well I guess I'm into WOF now...

 

 call me sparrow

 

-Sparrowwarrior3

 

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cobrapanther473

:)

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Đ₳ł₴Ɏ/₮ⱤɄ₴₮

I am...

A Jedi!

A Redcloak!

A Half-Blood(Daughter of Poseidon)!

A Werewolf!

Gang: Me, Devin/Worthy, Karmo/Jolt, Shane/King, Conor, Briggan, Abeke, Uraza, Meilin, Jhi, Rollan, Essix, Anakin, Obi-Wan, Ak'wan, Aventine, Tamaki

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Shocked, I jerked my head up.
"Father... you know I'd never give up freedom of rules and betrayal..." I spluttered, trying to make sense of what he just said.
"And leadership," finished Father, a sad gleam in his eye. "Those aren't your freedoms, Aleu, those are mine. I'm merely offering you your own freedoms-freedom from me. From being alone, from being threatened by vulnerability," he finished.
No, no, he couldn't be serious. Not my Father. Not the stubborn, bold, courageous wolf, that had taken me under his wing and taught me all I knew.
"But, Father," I persisted. "How would they welcome me? They know I'm your daughter."
They know I'm the impure cub.
Father sighed.
"They will test you. Make sure you wouldn't turn on them. Ensure that you knew where your loyalties lie."
I opened my mouth to protest, but was silenced by a swish of Father's tail.
"They aren't dumb, the Pack, I assure you. They'd welcome you fully, as long as I don't come along. Besides, you're grown now, and won't be another burden on the nursing mothers."
I frowned angrily.
"That's just the point! They threw you out, Father! I will never abandon you to such a fate!" I said, getting off of the rock. I didn't want to hear any more.

I turned in his direction, waiting for him to come down as well.
"My daughter... the only fate I cannot bear is losing you," he whispered to the wind, voice barely audible, as if praying to the stars for our well being, to console himself rather than me.
I knew he meant "losing" as in death, but I couldn't help scorning his logic, especially in the mood I was in.
"It has taken me so long to admit to this choice. Please, guide her in her steps," murmured Father once more, stepping off the rock with a sigh.

To destiny, loyalty, and the hardships of finding out who you were.

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Hi there  I'm a 

Gahoolian

foxcraft master

proud tigerstar supporter (he did what he did since bluestar ruined his cheezburger. Logic.)

i ship siffla

saaaamb

i don't ship Pelli and soren

Well I guess I'm into WOF now...

 

 call me sparrow

 

-Sparrowwarrior3

 

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sparrowwarrior3

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Hi there  I'm a 

Gahoolian

foxcraft master

proud tigerstar supporter (he did what he did since bluestar ruined his cheezburger. Logic.)

i ship siffla

saaaamb

i don't ship Pelli and soren

Well I guess I'm into WOF now...

 

 call me sparrow

 

-Sparrowwarrior3

 

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thorelf164

yea you should continue it

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Jessica,Jess,or Jessie

 

I like dogs and big dodges.

Big Trucks and football are awesome.

I love food

 

Go Packers!!!

 

 

 

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*wonders why more people arent reading this* 

 

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Hi there  I'm a 

Gahoolian

foxcraft master

proud tigerstar supporter (he did what he did since bluestar ruined his cheezburger. Logic.)

i ship siffla

saaaamb

i don't ship Pelli and soren

Well I guess I'm into WOF now...

 

 call me sparrow

 

-Sparrowwarrior3