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She groans. Writing songs were certainly interesting, if not struggling. "Grr!" she shouted. 

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Genesis slid in, and looked over her shoulder. "Hit a metaphorical wall?"

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Cosimia laughed, and sighed. "Yeah. Working on a new song, but it doesnt seem to be working..."

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Eva pattered in, glancing at the piece of paper Cosmia was scribbling on. "'Lyrics'?" She asked. "Could I help? It's like lyric poetry, is it not?"

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"Sort of. You might be able to help. This is the song so far:

 

I know the end, I know it's coming. There's nothing left for me to do. 

Even though you and I always fought,I know I'm gonna miss you in the morning. 

You were always taking care of me, watching over me, so I've decided that if I'm gonna have someone to be next to me, it's gonna be you.

If I have one last dream, I want you next to me. 

 

I always knew that no matter what, you always had my back. 

You would always take care of me. You would always keep me safe. You always kept me sound when you were around. 

I know that if I needed a spark, you would be there to light the way. You and I could make a fire of dreams. 

If I ever needed a light to guide my way, you'd be there. If I ever needed shelter, you'd be there. 

If there is ever one person on this Earth I would want to spend my whole life with, it's you. 

 

If I have one last dream,I want you to be next to me. 

If there's one last dream before the end, I want you to be net to me. With me, next to me.

 

If I'm gonna have one person to be next to me, it's you. 

If I have one last dream,I want you next to me. 

You next to me. 

 

I need to decide if I want to extend it or end it. 

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"Hm," Eva said. "Well, i can’t really detect a pattern for rhyming in here. For the first verse, it's an 'abac' pattern. But even then, the lyrics don’t have a rhythm to follow. The third line in the first verse is reeeally long. You could shorten that to 'You we're always watching over me, so I’ve decided that if it's the end, I want you' or something along those lines. It's really pretty so far, though! Now, is the second verse the chorus?"

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"Yep."

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"Well, normally, a chorus rhymes. The chorus is all over the place. You could follow the same guidelines as the first, an 'abac' pattern, or, you could use a typical 'abab' or 'abc abc'. Do you see what I’m getting at?" 

 

((sorry if this is too critical, I help my friends write songs and I’m taking a course on lyrical poetry *shrugs*))

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"But the thing is, I want it to be abstract and not conform to strict rhythms."

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"Ohh, I see!" Eva tapped her head, as if to make clear that she understood. "Do you plan on performing this?"

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Anastasia stared at Cosimia's paper. "That's nice," she remarked. To be honest, Ana didn't really know exactly what it was, but it was good.

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"Thanks," Cosimia said to Anastasia. "And yes, I do plan on performing this."

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