Here is my new Chapter 5 draft:
Chapter 5: Court Martial and Fort Braker
Tom walked out of the car, extending his hand, only realizing it sub-consciously. Within moments, Katie grasped it, and Tom just then fully realized it.
Part of him didn’t want to let go, but he knew it wasn’t the time to tell her.
Again, something spontaneous happened. “Let’s go,” he said, for once sounding like a gentleman when he talked like Katie.
Katie, who was awe-struck, and in love with his new behavior, thought,
“At least I didn’t have get embarrassed…”
Tom walked towards the entrance of the fort. He and Katie waited there, somehow, he still latched onto Katie’s hand, watching the beautiful sunset…and…the figure of Mr. Raci, or Katie’s way of saying the name, Mr. Ranchini, incredibly far away?
“I swear I can hear his obnoxious panting from this far,” Katie thought, “He’s ruining this romantic moment,” thinking she could hear him out of breath from this far.
After standing a couple more hours there, the newly-formed couple(?) watching their first sunset together, Tom suddenly let go of Katie’s hand.
She looked at him resentfully, then started walking toward the edge, pretending to jump off out of sadness and resentness.
Then, suddenly, she tripped on a rock when she was almost to the edge. “AAAAAHHHH!” Katie screamed as she tumbled down.
“KATIE!” Tom yelled as he jumped off after her.
As they were in free-fall, Tom lunged forward, and grabbed Katie by her waist, putting her above him, once he noticed the ground was getting closer.
Katie steered them towards a tree, and luckily, the tree slowed their fall dramatically. As Tom was assaulted by thorns and branches when they crashed through the trees, Katie held onto him for dear life.
Then, there was a loud thud, and Tom was on the ground, groaning from the dozens of cuts and bruises he had, while Katie looked at him from above, worriedly.
Suddenly, Tom fell unconscious. “No, no!” Katie exaggerated, “Tom! Tom, my love,” she started crying, “You can’t die!”
Then, she got a mischievous idea, she leaned forward, and was about to kiss me, until the sound of…Mr. Raci yelling, “What are you doing to poor Mr. Braker?!”
Katie jumped off of her ex-boyfriend, and started crying, “Tom-my love is dead!” She then ran to an exhausted Mr. Raci, and grabbed him and shook him by the shoulders, “Save him! Save him Mr. Ranchini!” She sobbed, her tears soaking her clothes.
“Wait,” Mr. Raci said, getting close to Tom, and feeling if he had any breath left.
“Is he alive?” Katie asked hurriedly, jumping around to get a better view of Tom and Mr. Raci.
“Be quiet, Miss Catheri-“ “It’s Katie, Katie Brook,” Katie interrupted Mr. Raci.
“Miss Katie Brook, yes, Tom Braker, the man you assaulted,” Mr. Raci, who still misunderstood the incident, continued, “is still alive. But now you, Miss Bro-“ “Call me Katie, no Brook at the end, if you have to, call me Miss Katie,” Katie said with a heavy sigh, walking back into Fort Braker.
“Hey! You little brat! You can’t just run away from Court-Martial (Military Court) just like that!”
“Catch me outside how bout that!” Yelled Katie as she started running.
“YOU-“ Mr. Raci was cut short by another “Catch me outside how bout that!” by Katie.
Mr. Raci tried to lift up Tom, but all of his muscle mass was incredibly heavy, and even the fit, strong, and cool Mr. Raci couldn’t lift up the teen.
He dialed a number on his phone, and then a voice could be heard.
“Hello, is this Tim Brook?”
“Yes Mr. Raci?”
“Mr. Brook, we have a new Court-Martial Defendant, and this case is going to be interesting, as her last name is also Brook.”
“Bring her here ASAP (As soon as possible), her trial will begin tomorrow, promptly at 9:00 AM.”
“I will make sure she is there by then, and by the way, the defendant was caught right outside Fort Braker. And I also need someone to help me carry Tom Braker into the Fort.”
“Got it,” Mr. Brook (Tim Brook) said sharply, before promptly ending the call.
Within minutes, the sound of running could be heard, and it was Hark Latten, another highschooler recruited.
I will give you a hint about the easter egg, remember the ship "Tomie" and look through Katie's dialogue, pls tell me if you find it!