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shywolf401

People assume that nothing's wrong

"You're smiling, so you're okay"

Yes, I seem like I'm strong

But I'm really just the prey

 

It's deception, the art of lying

Someone's smile could always be fake

I'm sick of trying, always crying

My life could be at stake

 

Of course it's not just me,

Others feel the same feeling,

Though I wish it was, you see,

So they could all begin healing

 

It starts with a little temptation,

Just a little control,

It gets harder to quit-no amount of negotiation

can get me out of this black hole

 

It's a mind trick,

Only medicine can break,

You start to realize, it starts to click

This is a nightmare from which you will never wake

 

What was that feeling they call joy?

I'm trapped inside a tired, terrible void

Am I some kind of toy?

Everything I loved to do is now unenjoyed

 

There's no end to this,

I'm making people sad by just hearing my name,

To really laugh, with pure happiness I miss,

And it pains me others feel the same.

 

I know there's a cure,

even though it takes a long time,

I'm absolutely sure

this ladder of dullness you will no longer have to climb

 

I'm not there yet but wait for me,

I'm making my way there slowly,

It's like the waves at the beach are pulling me back into the sea,

For now I'll hide behind my fake smile-but soon, you'll see,

 

From this dark ocean we will flee.

And then we will be free.

 

 

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shywolf401

is this even good idk

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It is a great poem, Blaise

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cobraphoenix530

It looks like it could be an actual song. I love it 

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shywolf401

Oh wow thanks haha

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It was inspired by the song "Empty" by Jaiden Animations and someone else idk who

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scarletdragon3016

That's such a great poem! It conveys feelings and emotions and is really a window to how someone is feeling. (I'm honestly happy all the time but I'm not bothered by this kind of thing).

Some things could be improved, though (no offense), and that goes with the fact that I'm not good at writing poems. For instance, since you're making it seem depressing and dark, you could call it "it's a mind trick / that no medicine can break", emphasizing how dire this "dark ocean" is and how hard it is to escape from it.

But I know I probably (99% probability) misunderstood what you were trying to convey and I am sorry. Just, in short, this has a really good theme. (I viewed it as there being hope in the direst of situations, or places. Probably I'm wrong again. :/) So it isn't really a depressing song for me; instead, it's just reminding me that when life is at its worst and in that dark ocean, we can still get out of it...someday!

This song really reminds me of a song, by the way...

 

-Galaxian Explosion-

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happyhopeful24

i can’t snap but if i could my fingers would be broken because THAT WAS AMAZING. the rhyming is to die for. the poem and the message was so good. tbh i relate and honestly we should just send you to a slam right now honey you’re doing amazing

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darksapphire128

Oh my goodness. I'm not even going to water down what I did. I RAPPED.

 

As I read this poem I rapped to it and it gave me an NF feel to it, about how people aren't always happy, that's a lie people believe in everyday. That we as people are supposed to always be happy. Because sometimes you can't. Things happen in life and it's hard to get back to where you were emotionally. I loved how you also explained that one day, we won't feel like were in the abyss anymore. One day we'll be free. It's all about hope my friend. It's all about putting faith into the future. 10/10 poem. I loved it so much.

 

And, many of you guys might not know this, but in real life, I'm often depressed. So this song personally meant something to me. Like as my own mind taking to itself. So I thank you for sharing this with me (and the rest of sambtopia).

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hydrahoneydew9

O h 

 

its inspired by Empty-?

 

so thaaaaaat explains why the tune of it was in it

 

dark ocean? Hmm.

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shywolf401

Galaxian Explosion- Thank you for the ideas. I was having a hard time expressing how I felt, so I somehow created this.

 

Happeh- THANK YOU! Honestly I made this up from scratch xD Who needs to plan anyways. We need to make a chat thread-it's been forever!

 

Ora- That means a lot, thank you. This poem is pretty personal to me also, about the current state of depression I may be witnessing or feeling but that it honestly doesn't last forever.

 

Ocean- Mhm haha 

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